Carpe Diem #1778: Moonlight Rail

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flying in moonlight
trains travel the winter night
father sings his tale


Today we were asked to revise a Haiku by Masaoka Shiki (14 October 1867 - 19 September 1902). I believe my verse is more an interpretation inspired by Shiki's original poem than a revision. In a time gone by nearly 50 years ago now, my father (31 May 1936 - 28 November 2010) would play his guitar and sing old railway and folk songs. The ninth anniversary of my father's passing is tomorrow and I wrote this poem to honor him.

the wild geese take flight
low along the railroad tracks
in the moonlit night

© Masaoka Shiki


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    1. Thank you.
      I locked horns with my father a lot. He was an obsessive perfectionist who played a big part in my feeling that I can't do anything right no matter how hard I try. However, he was very devoted and he stood by me even when my mental illness caused me to treat him dreadfully before I was finally properly diagnosed. He would be 83 years old if he were still alive.


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