What Pegman Saw: Jimmy Sundown: Tinkering in the Florida Keys


After the long tour, we headed to Frank’s home in the Middle Torch Key. He wanted to take Art to the music store in town, and I told them to go.

“You sure you’ll be okay flyin’ solo, Katy?” a concerned Art inquired.

“Yes, Uncle Art,” I reassured him. “This is why Frank hired me.”

Art smiled and handed me a big plastic bucket full of building blocks.

“Jimmy likes to tinker,” he told me.

Gem Moondreamer
Nikki Lee
The Real Cie



Notes:
The Pegman flash stories are usually 150 words. I cut this one in half to accommodate the "tinker" prompt, which I liked for this bit.
Jimmy Sundown is a Team Netherworld WIP based on an idea by team member Nikki Lee. Katy Vincent is a young travel nurse with a troubled past who is hired by Frank Michaels, a millennial blues revivalist, to care for his ailing great-uncle Jimmy.
Fraternal twin brothers Arthur and James Gibson were big on the Florida blues-rock scene during the latter part of the 20th century. Jimmy's health problems forced them into retirement after the turn of the century. 
Katy is honored to care for a legend from a musical genre which she loves but deeply saddened to watch a brilliant mind being erased by a devastating illness.

16 comments:

  1. Interesting snippet -- I'm glad you included the extra note, because I was pretty confused about what was happening.

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    1. Hi Joy,
      This is the sort of critique I appreciate, because I am working on so many projects which make sense to me, but I need to know when they don't make sense to others. Also, I appreciate the fact that you phrased your criticism politely. Thank you.

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  2. nice joining of two prompts.

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  3. I always enjoy your snippets - which start/encourage my mind to wander. And am equally grateful for the notes.

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    1. Thank you. Some people hate the notes, but I feel they are necessary because, hopefully, these people aren't in my head, and without the notes, these pieces don't tie in to the bigger world which they are part of.
      At this point, except for poetry, I am fairly well unable to do one-off flash fictions. I have too many WIPs going on. For those who think I need to pare down, I can't, won't, and don't want to. For a purely physical explanation, I have ADD and bipolar disorder, both conditions which lead to a brain that is all over the place. Also, I'm a stubborn ass.

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  4. Nice! I'm assuming Jimmy's a kid with a great future! (I may have messed up, though, given that I think this is the first time I've seen your site or heard about your WIP!)

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    1. Weeeellll...
      If by "great future" you mean his dementia will kill him and he will reincarnate as a kid with a great future. He's 69 years old and his great days in this lifetime are behind him.
      Frank, on the other hand, is a kid with a great future in the twenty-first century.
      Fear not--Team Netherworld are a troupe of unknown fuckers. No-one has heard of us or our multitude of WIPs.

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  5. It's a really interesting take on the prompt there, a window into a whole other world of characters and stories. Thanks, too, for the notes :)

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    1. Thank you. It's a challenge for me to try and make people see what I'm talking about in so few words, which is why I sometimes enjoy a prompt like this!

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  6. Nice job adding tinker into the mix - and succinct.
    at first my mind thought you were talking about "Art" as art -- because it came next to music
    - but then I realized - quickly - it was name....

    ~priorhouse.blog

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  7. Nice take on the prompts! Great to see you this week on Pegman.

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  8. Without the additional information I was thinking Jimmy a child, and I liked that you had left us to conclude this for ourselves. Only then to find out how wrong I was. I much prefer your version. :)

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    1. It's all good! Truth be told, I just ran out of words. ;-)
      I have ADD and bipolar disorder, and both of these lead to having a brain full of subplots. One of my challenges when writing is making clear to my audience what's going on. The fewer words I have to complete the task, the more difficult the challenge!

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